Post by april on May 10, 2004 10:05:34 GMT -5
Well I've decided to post the intro of my research paper that I wrote last semester on domestic violence. I want to know what you all think. My teacher had this method where we did a technique called free writing (kind of like journaling, you just write down whatever comes into your mind without thinking about it) before starting the paper. and this is about half of what I came up with and i later used it for the introduction to my paper. Let me know what you all think 
"Remember the drastic current of emotions that run through our minds when experiencing the thrill of riding on a roller coaster for the very first time? There's that calm feeling when the carts first begin to move, then the anticipation as you drift up towards the top of the tracks and once there, that feeling as if you're on top of the world, where you feel safe and protected as if no one can even reach you. However, when you look ahead and notice the curve of the tracks dropping straight towards the ground, you realize a new emotion emerge into existence: fear. The frightening thought of never seeing your friends and family again should the cart malfunction and somehow throw you off the tracks, clashing into the earth below. Then, as the car speeds up while traveling the steep hill downward, you pray that something will save you from this uncontrollable turmoil.
This stream of emotions that takes place only within minutes is much like the feelings floating around in a violent relationship. One moment you feel so safe and secure with the one you love right beside you, making you feel like nothing will ever harm you; then the very next moment, it's as if everything you fought so hard for plummets down to nothing. You find yourself struggling against the force of something so much stronger than you and you cannot even attempt to fight back. That force is the strength of the one you believed would never hurt you, would do anything in his power to keep you away from harm. Just when you feel like you can't go on fighting this incredibly powerful fierceness, something saves you and allows you to carry on at least until the next time it happens. If there is a next time, that is. However, some victims are not so lucky."
oh and i got an A on the final draft of the paper ;D I felt like it was probably the best paper I have ever written for a class.
"Remember the drastic current of emotions that run through our minds when experiencing the thrill of riding on a roller coaster for the very first time? There's that calm feeling when the carts first begin to move, then the anticipation as you drift up towards the top of the tracks and once there, that feeling as if you're on top of the world, where you feel safe and protected as if no one can even reach you. However, when you look ahead and notice the curve of the tracks dropping straight towards the ground, you realize a new emotion emerge into existence: fear. The frightening thought of never seeing your friends and family again should the cart malfunction and somehow throw you off the tracks, clashing into the earth below. Then, as the car speeds up while traveling the steep hill downward, you pray that something will save you from this uncontrollable turmoil.
This stream of emotions that takes place only within minutes is much like the feelings floating around in a violent relationship. One moment you feel so safe and secure with the one you love right beside you, making you feel like nothing will ever harm you; then the very next moment, it's as if everything you fought so hard for plummets down to nothing. You find yourself struggling against the force of something so much stronger than you and you cannot even attempt to fight back. That force is the strength of the one you believed would never hurt you, would do anything in his power to keep you away from harm. Just when you feel like you can't go on fighting this incredibly powerful fierceness, something saves you and allows you to carry on at least until the next time it happens. If there is a next time, that is. However, some victims are not so lucky."
oh and i got an A on the final draft of the paper ;D I felt like it was probably the best paper I have ever written for a class.
I don't like that story, it's too sad. I never replied to this before, I though I did. That one you posted Frenchy, I read that like around when you first posted it and it's so sad, every once in a while that story pops into my head and I start crying. Lol!! I can be such a weirdo sometimes... 
i guess it does kinda relate to what I wrote, but in the opposite way. in mine, one person is actually trying to kill the other