Faithy's Story

[Faithy]

Part One


“Where the hell is Amy?”
That thought kept ringing through her mind as she paced in the ally..
“yeah Amy is always late.. That’s one of her quirks, but really.. She is really late.” Elle sighed.
“I am probably worrying to much” she said to herself out loud. She turned and took in her surroundings for the 10th time in the last half hour.. She was unnerved, and not just because Amy was late. It was getting cold as f**k, and she felt edgy, like someone was watching, but more like some one was gawking, staring, drilling into her. She took her hands out of her jean jacket, pushed her dark hair from her eyes, and focused on the corner Amy should be coming around any second. Desperately trying to shake that nasty feeling she wasn’t alone in the ally.


Three blocks away Amy is bumbling down the street in a hurried fashion, looking kind of like a goth Librarian. All doom and gloom, black clothes, dark makeup, blue hair, and more books than you can shake a stick at.
“God Elle is going to kill me” she said to herself under her breath.. And in that moment noticing she could see her breath she thought..
‘SO going to kill me! Just a few blocks now, and yeah and hay. maybe Elle was late for a change, you know, and hasn’t been there long freezing her ass off....” She stopped and sighed, shifting her books she mumbled
“yep, I am delusional.. Like Elle is ever late” just as she started tromping back up the hill, She tripped over a crack in the acceding sidewalk, spilling her stack of binders and books all over the ground.
“Damn it! This is shaping up to be one shitty day!”


Back in the ally Elle paces.. Hands back in her jacket pockets.. Dark blue jeans, and a off white sweater.. Even with the jacket and the sweater she still felt cold.. Cold from the temp, or from the creepy feeling she was getting.. That she wondered..
“come on Amy.. come on” the feeling just kept growing on her.. She shuddered,
“Engulfing darkness, and spreading shadows” she remembered that quote from somewhere, a book probably..
“ and not to mention that shadow in the corner seems to be getting darker by the moment...” she stared into it.. Eyes narrowing, she could almost.. Maybe... make out a figure?
“No...” she had been in this ally since before the sun set, no one was there, she felt stupid for being so paranoid. She straitened her back..
“enough” she says to herself
“ I am standing outside of a church for craps sake, what am I jittery about?” her demeanor changes.. Lightens, as she convinces herself there is no reason to be worried.. She again focuses on the corner,
“Any time now..”


Kneeling Amy tries to collect her things..
“and I had them all in order to! So much for that” she heard a click behind her.. She glances back and see’s nothing
“hmmm, creepy tonight” she thinks to herself.. Of course almost every night in this po dunk town is creepy .. Small town USA and none of the typical church going type approve of me. I get yelled at, made fun of, and people put milkshakes on my car... f**king hick boys. It was never like that in New York.. Why did Dad have to lose his job and move here, to Illinois of all places? ever since mom died it just gets worse.. If is wasn’t for Elle, I’d probably have...” She pauses as she stands, with the jumbled books once again in her arms.
“Yeah great, my only friend and I make her wait in the cold for 3 hours. I’m such an idiot” attempting to make up for the time lost, Amy begins to jog the rest of the 3 blocks..
“Uphill sucks” she thought “and these books are heavy” she crosses the street, “2 more blocks” and then
“Ummmph!” What the!??! something had slammed into Amy from the side flatting her and tossing all her books sky high.
“You ass!” she yells, then tried to roll on her back to get a look at who is was, but before she could even get turned around it was on her.. Heavy and close to her face.. This awful stench.. “Get off me, get off me!!!” she screams while trying to hit the person and wiggle from under it at the same time..
Smack
her head was slammed against the pavement, neck strained to the side, as the assailant put his hand over her mouth. The figure leans in.. That awful stench again.. Amy’s eyes try to focus.. She struggles..
“Can’t breath....” And just as she musters the strength to try to turn away to get air, it bites her..
“Oh my god..” She screams in her head... “oh god..”
“I’m going to die”

[Faithy]

Part Two



Back in the ally, Elle is still pacing.. She looks at her watch and says
“Screw it” she starts to walk to the corner.. She’s going home.. She’s been here for hours, she’ll catch Amy another time.. Elle comes around the corner.. Looks to the left as she turns away to walk down the hill.. Then she hears .. something.. She snaps her head around.. And a pile..a jumble of something, moving in front of her, a few blocks ahead.. Wait no.. a man on top of a girl.. A girl who looks a lot like Amy..
“Amy!!! Oh god”
she runs.. Like she has never ran before.. Never that kind of running..
“Here I was sitting around in the ally and Amy is out here getting raped.. “ she scolds herself as she runs.. It took only seconds it seemed to clear to two blocks to where the man and Amy lay, and since it was downhill the momentum was good.
“Half a block..and all that martial arts is about to pay off in a big way she thought” Elle used all her strength, and just as she reached them, stepped to the side, swung her back foot around using the momentum, and kicked that bastard smack in the face.. She had knocked him clean off of Amy.. Blood splattered on the side walk, and it was all over the mans face..
“ I must have kicked him hard she thought” assuming the blood was from the guys face, not Amy’s neck.. She jumped over Amy, just as the man was turning to get up she balled her fist and drove it into his face.. Grabbed his shirt pulled him up and did it again..
“Bastard, bastard, BASTARD!” She kept hitting him.. then a sound.. What was it? She punched again. Then it registered to her that a car was coming..
“A car”, she thought.... “Good.. Help..” She put all her power into one last punch, and spun to flag the car.. But she noticed that Amy was still laying on the ground, not moving..
“What the f**k?” she thought..
“Amy, are you ok?” She saw the man get up, out of the corner of her eye.. then he saw the car.. Looked at her, then the car.. Then turned and ran.. Elle kneeled by Amy, so much blood.. On her neck? From the mans face?... Not from the man.. From Amy..


Clad sang along to the stereo...
“I Stand Alone, Feeling Your Sting Down Inside Me..”
One hand on the wheel and the other slapping the dash to the rhythm.
“I'm Not Dying For It, I Stand Alone..”
Suddenly someone darts in front of his car.. Clad stiffens and he slams on his breaks..
“Oohhhh f**k!!!” Fish tailing, he comes to a stop inches away form this girl..
“Jesus Mary and Joseph!!! what the hell are you doing??” He demands as he jumps out of the car to confront the girl he nearly turned to road kill..
“my friend” she says gasping
“you’ve got to help my friend” There’s blood on her white-ish sweater, and laying a few feet away is another girl on the side walk.. Before he could move the first girl was back at the injured girls side.
“Amy, hun, your going to be ok..“ She was putting her hands on the girls neck
“come help me! We need to get her to a hospital!!” The dark haired one demanded
“ah ah.. Yeah.. uh.. What.. umm..sure.. Just a.. let me.. “ Clad studdered while standing there in shock.
“open your back door for christ’s sake!, help me get her in..”
“Yeah, yes” he jumped into action.. Flinging open the door and scrambling to help put the girl he now knew as Amy in the back..
“We have to go, we have to go NOW.”
Clad paused for a second.. The was a lot of blood.. A lot.
“Drive!!!” the dark haired girl yelled as she pointed to the steering wheel and closed the back door.
“Yeah..” he ran around the car.. Amy and the other were inside now.. He jumped in the seat, slammed it into drive,. Tires squealed, and the car began to move before he even got his door closed..
“Fast” he thought as he glanced in the rear view
“I need to go fast”


“What did he do to you.. What did he do?” Elle stared at Amy’s face.. So pale.. Elle was in the back seat cradling Amy’s head in her lap, putting pressure on her wound with one hand.. And trying to get a pulse with the other..
“Damn it.. Damn IT!!” Elle cried..
“What? What??” the guy in the front asked..
“What the hell happened?”
“I don’t know.. I don’t know.. I can’t get a pulse..” Elle was shaking now.. It was all so terrifying.
“Is she breathing?” the guy asked.. Straining to see them in the mirror.
“I don’t know..” Elle yelled..
“Snap out of it” she thought.. “ you can do this, think, come on think”
she did her best to stop the shaking.. They were getting close to the hospital, she put her hand in front of Amy’s nose and mouth..
“A breath!?! Was that a breath??” She paused.. Holding her own breath.. And again she felt it.. Ever so faint.. But it was there.. She was breathing.. Elle’s heart jumped.. God at least she was breathing.


Clad was speeding,
“Ok, ok” he thought, “almost there” He saw the hospital emergency room entrance.
“It hasn’t been that long, I got here really fast.. As fast as I could” He told himself as he turned sharply into the parking lot.. He looked in the rear view and saw the dark haired girl bracing herself as he turned..
“f**k, f**k so sorry.. God I am just trying to get there and..” he tried to put on the breaks gently, but it ended up jerking quite a bit. The girls lurched forward, but he didn’t stop to finish his apology.. He jumped out of the car and yelled..
“Help us!! Somebody help us!!” he saw a nurse coming, but didn’t bother to wait. He ran to the back door and started helping the girl pull Amy out.. It was the first time he saw what was wrong.. He saw why the other girl kept covering Amy’s neck.. It was awful.. He paused from the mere shock of it, just staring.. The girl noticed his pause, and he thought for sure he would yell at him again.. But she didn’t. He saw she was crying a little.. She just kept trying to get the girl out by herself. Then the nurse shoved him out of the way.. She yelled
“we need a stretcher out here!!” And was helping the other girl prop Amy up against the car as two more nurses brought out a stretcher.
“Good lord almighty” the nurse proclaimed and motioned for the others to hurry.. The three nurses put Amy on the stretcher and speed her into the hospital leaving the other two standing outside..
The Dark haired girl stood with an exhausted expression on her face as she watched her friend get wheeled away. She let out a breath, and put her hands on her face. Clad didn’t know if she was crying, he wanted to go and comfort her, to ask if she was ok. but he couldn’t bring himself to move.. He just stood there. They both just stood there.

[Faithy]

Ok well that is te first chapter in a story I am writing, I thought I would post it to see what you guys thought. Read it and tell me what you think, ok..
Ciao!

[Faithy]

Here is another chunk of my story.. It needs a lot of editing, but how’s it so far?

Elle wondered if all hospitals were so painfully bright, as she tried to shield her eyes from the glare of the florescent flickering lights that were surely melting her brain.. She was sitting in the waiting room noticing how time moved at a snails pace. Amy’s family would be here soon, and they would have questions.. And the cops, the nurse said they would come as well.. So many questions and Elle wasn’t sure if she could answer them. She wasn’t even sure what she had seen, how could she explain this to Amy’s Dad and Brother, plus the police. Elle wasn’t sure she remembered everything right.. She kept running what happened through her head, but it was.. Distorted, like that mans face was, wrong. The more she thought about it, the more uncomfortable she became, it reminded her of something, something she didn’t care to remember.

Clad was standing outside lighting up yet another cigaret.
“Good thing I bought another pack” he thought to himself. He hadn’t moved from his place in the parking lot since the nurse had shoved him. He was still standing in the same spot. The other girl went inside. He almost followed her, but his legs weren’t working at the time, so he just staid put. He was feeling kind of stalker-esk, watching her through the big glass window as he smoked. He could see her in the waiting room. Sitting in this chair, rubbing her forehead, she kept glancing around nervously. She had talked to several nurses, and used the pay phone a few times. But now she was just sitting. She was pretty, pretty upset, but still he couldn’t help thinking she was attractive. She had long hair, kind of a dark redish brown, she was tall, but not to tall.. Nicely built, cute face, He wondered who the hell she was. Not like this was a big town, and he had never seen her before. But then again, he did keep to himself an awful lot, but he would remember seeing her. He was sure of that.
“Jesus, what am I doing?” clad said to himself. “Hooking up is the last thing I should be thinking about” he glanced one more time in the window, threw his cig on the ground, and put it out with a twist of his foot. He sighed as he walked to his car, the rear door was still open, the seat cover had blood on it. He paused at the door.
“I’ll just pitch it” he thought. He slammed the door, and walked around to the driver’s side. He glanced again in the window, then got in his car. “Better find a place to park, I suppose the cops will want to talk to me” he muttered as he started up his car, he caught himself staring in the window again as he pulled away.. “better park.”

Elle heard a car start outside, ignoring the sound she continued to ponder over what she was going to tell everyone. She had to be careful here, if she said the wrong thing, all that stuff in her past could speedily catch up with her. Last thing she needed was everyone in town thinking she was crazy. And if she said what she thought she saw, they all would think she was. “It was dark,” she told herself. “They aren’t going to expect a good description, I mean, it was really dark. I’ll just tell them I didn’t really see him. I just didn’t see.” But at the same time that worried her, how would they catch that thing if they had noting to go on.. How would they make him pay? But then again if they thought she was crazy she wouldn’t be any help at all.
“God this sucks” she said out loud under her breath. Her palms were sweaty and she rubbed them on her jeans, then for the first time she got a good look at her hands.. “oh jesus” she said startled. She got up and went to the nearest nurse, “please, I need a bathroom” she said.
“No problem hun, right over there” the nurse replied pointing to the left of the counter.
Elle hurried down the hall, eyes down trying to avoid the stares of the passing people. They all looked at her, she could feel it , and why wouldn’t they, she was covered in blood.. She felt hot, the hallway seemed to get longer and longer, she saw the door.. She could hear her heart beating so loud she swore it was echoing in the hallway. “Just a little farther” Elle slammed into the door forcing it open, she rushed to the sink, breathing heavily. “Just got to breath” she told herself.. She turned on the water and began scrubbing her hands. She looked in the mirror, she looked like hell. She didn’t want Amy’s family seeing her like this.. She took a wad of paper towels and got them wet, then put them over her face. The cool felt good, she hadn’t realized how warm she felt. She slipped of her jean jacket and continued to clean up.

Clad braced himself as he walked through the door to the waiting room. He finally got the nerve to go and talk to her, to face whatever had happened tonight. glancing around he noticed she wasn’t in her chair. “Hmmm, where did she go?” He looked around. She wasn’t here at all.. “damn it! I just saw her.” He sat down in a chair near where she had been sitting. He wondered where she had gone off to. He saw a nurse at the reception desk look at him, he cringed, he shifted so he didn’t have to see her watching. But he still felt it. he shifted again, looked over and she was still watching. “God doesn’t anyone have manners anymore?, didn’t her mother teacher her not to stare?” feeling extremely uncomfortable Clad stood up and was about o walk out of the waiting room when 2 cops walked in.. “shit” Clad though. They began talking to the nurse at the desk, confused Clad just sat back down. He figured if he continued acting agitated they were going to think he did something wrong. He tried to clam himself but he still jumped out of his skin when one of the cops laid a hand on his shoulder and said “excuse me sir? Were you involved in the incident the occurred this evening?”
“Ah, yeah” clad said.. “ I mean like sort of, I just drove them here”
“hmmm, ok” said the older officer, “let me write some of this down” the officer paused as he pulled a note book and pen from his shirt pocket. he was gruff, slightly gray hair, but he seems nice enough. The young one looks like a prick though, keeps eyeing me , like looking for a reason to bust out with the cuffs.. Clad stood nervously as the older officer continued. “Ok go on, start from the beginning, tell me what you did, and saw” Clad took a breath as he prepared to recap what had occurred that night, every freakish moment..

Elle was on the floor now, in the bathroom. About as far under the sink she could get, considering. Her back was against the cold wall and she was watching the door, listening to the people walking past outside. She just needed to stay there a while, just to be in the quiet, to clear her head. “I just want to be gone” she thought to her self, “anywhere but here..”

[Frenchy Faith]

Gosh I like it !!! I hope it won't take you too long to write the sequel, can I wanna know it !!! lol
I noticed just 2 typos in it, & apart that, I didn't read a lots of english books so far, but when I read that it looks like the Anne Rice's book I'm reading right now, I mean, the way to write.
I think i begin to guess some stuff about the story, but I'm not sure, lol

[Faithy]

omg! Frenchy Anne Rice?? You have got to be kidding.. I am sooooooo not even close to that good. But that is a great complement thank you very much. And I am really awful at editing, so tell me what the mistakes were please.. lol I saw one before you posted and changed it.. It was recant was suppose to be recap.. But I want to know if there are others. When I write something I know what it’s suppose to say, and sometimes, I see what it suppose to be there, not what is, so I miss mistakes. So it you see something let me know ok. Thanks again for the great complement. I am so flattered, lol.. Take care..
*hugs*

[Frenchy Faith]

lol, you're very welcome, & i truly think it.
The typos r

"if they had noting to" in the 3rd paragraph, I think u meant nothing ?

"Clad stood up and was about o walk out of the waiting room" in the one before the last paragraph, miss a "t" I think, it's not big mistake, lol just typos, & i'll print it & re-read it to see if I find other stuff (lol, i'll read it once more with a dictionary, just to be sure I understand every words, even if i got the whole meaning of it all)

& thanky for the moderator status !!! ;D ;D ;D

[Xander Snaps]

Very good story. Lol, sorry it took me so long before I finally read the whole thing though, and I havent read many books either but outta the books I can remember this is definetly better. I will read the next part much sooner than I did with this one.

Oh and thanks again for the moderator status to.

[Xander Snaps]

Lol, *sits here and waits* Any new parts of the story coming any time soon?

[Faithy]

Well I added 4 pages to my story today, but I wrote it on paper, so I will have to type it out on the computer before I post it. I finally got the tales of the slayer books, 1, 2, and 3, reading them I think inspired me a little. Lets hope it continues, lol, after I type what I have I will try to write some more. Wish me luck..

[Xander Snaps]

Yay. More story to come soon. Wooooohoooooo.

[Frenchy Faith]

[glow=purple,2,90000]Yay !!! yay !!!! & re re yay !!!!!

So great, I hope you'll type it soon ! 4 pages lol wow !!! great job !!!
Can't wait !!! [/glow]

[Xander Snaps]

Lol, well you're gonna have to. She hasnt typed them out yet.

[Frenchy Faith]

[glow=purple,2,90000]*wonders if by now you had had time to type it... waits impatiently* ;D[/glow]

[Xander Snaps]

Yeah, wheres them pages at huh missy?
Lmao, I wanna read them, don't rush yourself though, post them when it'll be convenient for you. We can wait. *Smacks Frenchy* Wait patientally!!!

[Faithy]

well the pages are typed already, but I had a problem working them in like I wanted. I messed up with the tense of the story and I was trying to cut in stuff about the main characters background into the part of the story I was at, and it didn’t work, so now I almost have the beginning of two stories, and I am trying to make it into the beginning of one. If that makes sense. It’s all scattered, and i need to organize it. That’s what I get for writing without looking at what I already had written. So wait a little longer, and if I can’t figure out anything I may just post what I have so you guys can tell me what you think. But I want to try a few other things first. So bare with me ok, lol. Not to much longer I promise.

[Frenchy Faith]

[glow=purple,2,90000]Writer's symptom here I see totally know what it's like lol... take your time then, lol I'm just glad to know you've been working on it... *can't wait but sits calmly on the chair in front of the desk, staring at faithy working* ... hmm, maybe that is disturbing to have someone staring? lmao... *sits away with sunglasses* is it better ? [/glow]

[Xander Snaps]

I'm also glad to know that you're working on the story. ;D